Following on from last week’s blog post on signposting language, as promised, here is a model text taken from ieltsbuddy.com . See if you can identify the phrases and expressions used to organise the ideas and paragraphs. Most of them were included in last week’s post but there are several new examples too. Clue: I found 11 altogether (1 example is repeated).
Here is the essay task:
|You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Write at least 250 words.
Here is the model answer:
Some people believe that animals should be treated in the same way humans are and have similar rights, whereas others think that it is more important to use them as we desire for food and medical research. This essay will discuss both points of view.
With regard to the exploitation of animals, people believe it is acceptable for several reasons. Firstly, they think that humans are the most important beings on the planet, and everything must be done to ensure human survival. If this means experimenting on animals so that we can fight and find cures for diseases, then this takes priority over animal suffering. Furthermore, it is believed by some that animals do not feel pain or loss as humans do, so if we have to kill animals for food or other uses, then this is morally acceptable.
However, I do not believe these arguments stand up to scrutiny. To begin, it has been shown on numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories via animal rights groups that animals feel as much pain as humans do, and they suffer when they are kept in cages for long periods. In addition, a substantial amount of animal research is done for cosmetics, not to find cures for diseases, so this is unnecessary. Finally, it has also been proven that humans can get all the nutrients and vitamins that they need from green vegetables and fruit. Therefore, again, having to kill animals for food is not an adequate argument.
To sum up, although some people argue killing animals for research and food is ethical, I would argue there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that this is not the case, and, therefore, steps must be taken to improve the rights of animals.
Did you find them all?
In the first paragraph, ‘whereas’ is used to show a contrasting point of view.
The second paragraph begins with ‘with regard to’ which is used to focus on one particular example or situation.
The writer sets out their argument in paragraph 2 using ‘firstly’ and ‘furthermore’.
The purpose of the second main paragraph (paragraph 3) is to examine an alternative point of view to that of the first main paragraph (paragraph 2), so the writer has used ‘however’ to indicate a contrasting perspective.
In this paragraph, they have set out the argument using ‘to begin’, ‘in addition’ and ‘finally’.
They reiterate (repeat) an opinion using ‘therefore, again’.
They start their conclusion with ‘to sum up’.
The linking word ‘although’ shows that the writer is referring to one of the points previously discussed and making a concession (indicating they understand that there is an alternative view to their own opinion).
‘Therefore’ is used for a second time to show a logical conclusion (in the first clause the writer is saying that killing animals for food and research is unethical; in the second clause they are saying that for this reason, we should protect animals’ rights).
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